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I get bored
Posted: Fri Sep 02, 2011 2:14 am
by Orodrist
and bad things happen. See, I'm mildly obsessive. When I get something in my head, I can't sleep until it's done. Normally, that means a day or two. This one was six. See, I decided for reasons no logic could explain that I needed to at least try to write a poem.
I've come to the conclusion poets are madmen.
So, in order to ensure I'm too embarrassed to ever attempt something so imbecilic again...I'm posting it here for you to tear apart, laugh at, and generally scorn. I'm quite cognizant of the fact that it's sloppy, sophomoric, and generally trite.
/couldn'tbebotheredtowriteatitle
*redacted*
Re: I get bored
Posted: Fri Sep 02, 2011 3:09 am
by ccgr
it has a good flow, I like it
Re: I get bored
Posted: Fri Sep 02, 2011 11:37 pm
by JOJ650s
Nice. *puts thumbs up.*
Orodrist wrote:
I've come to the conclusion poets are madmen.
Meh, I would not say they are mad. (Ok, some probably are.)
I would feel kinda embarrassed,
if I posted poetry,
because my thoughts on my own poetry change time from time.
(At one time I would think it's great, at another time silly and later I think it's great again.)
Well thats with my poetry at lest.
(As in, I don't think poetry other then mine is silly.)
Maybe I should post mine some time......
Still, I am impressed how much you got there.
Re: I get bored
Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2011 1:39 am
by Chozon1
If poets are madmen, then you're dancing under the moon with Artemis.
I rather liked it. The flow is nice (And well worth the time you put into it) and I like the somewhat jarring stops given to it by the rhythm.
The wordage itself is nice, though I'll have to think on it awhile. Deep water in that sea.
Re: I get bored
Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2011 3:27 am
by Orodrist
You guys aren't helping my sleep habits.
*sigh* why is it the only time you can't get people to criticize you is when you ask for it?
Re: I get bored
Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2011 6:44 am
by Chozon1
Maybe you should write something stupid. Help us out a bit.
Re: I get bored
Posted: Sun Sep 04, 2011 12:22 am
by jester747
Orodrist wrote:You guys aren't helping my sleep habits.
*sigh* why is it the only time you can't get people to criticize you is when you ask for it?
YOUR POEMS SUCK
Re: I get bored
Posted: Sun Sep 04, 2011 4:03 am
by JOJ650s
Chozon1 wrote:Maybe you should write something stupid. Help us out a bit.
Hmmm... make it sound like the setting is from midevil times.
(You know castles, knights, Dragons.)
Then mess it up, by throwing in shotguns, TNT, Mario,and planes.
To kill the rhyme, throw in the word orange a couple times.
(I like Mario, but he would not fit in a, would have been great setting)
Also throw in a some caps liKe tHis.
Then I will dislike your poems.