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My Stand Up Comedy

Postby LAVA89 » Wed Aug 29, 2012 11:25 pm

I have been performing amateur comedy since 2008. Any feedback on this video would be greatly appreciated!

Enjoy!


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Re: My Stand Up Comedy

Postby ccgr » Thu Aug 30, 2012 7:38 am

funny but sometimes you talk a little fast as I had to roll back the video to listen again and get the joke. Still can't make out the store one with guns and alcohol.

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Re: My Stand Up Comedy

Postby ArchAngel » Thu Aug 30, 2012 11:51 am

Drugs and alcohol. For, you know, parties.
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Re: My Stand Up Comedy

Postby LAVA89 » Thu Aug 30, 2012 2:49 pm

ccgr, thanks for watching...sorry about me talking too fast! I might add subtitles like I did for my other videos.

Thanks Arch...like you said, its drugs and alcohol. I might rewrite that slightly to set it up as a college party supply store. A little more absurd, but hopefully drives the idea home better.

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Re: My Stand Up Comedy

Postby TenorNegative » Sun Aug 18, 2013 3:13 pm

LOL, clever jokes man. Just keep practicing the delivery and timing and flow.

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Re: My Stand Up Comedy

Postby DeadManReedeemed » Wed Sep 04, 2013 7:26 pm

I remember this. Good stuff. 8)
“The humble sinner will sometimes be interpreted as one of the filthiest in the eyes of man yet immersed in the eyes of God, and this is due to the volition of honesty regarding his own corruption.”

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Re: My Stand Up Comedy

Postby LAVA89 » Wed Sep 04, 2013 8:08 pm

LOL, clever jokes man. Just keep practicing the delivery and timing and flow.
Haha, thanks man! Sorry I didn't see your post until now. Thanks for watching!
I remember this. Good stuff. 8)
Thanks DMR! I appreciate that!

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Re: My Stand Up Comedy

Postby mamabones » Mon Mar 09, 2015 11:20 am

I like your character, the goofy quick wit. You should totally keep that.. however you need to pronunciation a bit better, because I had to rewind to pick up some of your words... I thought your jokes were great! You used the word Ticked too many times, so come up with other words that mean the same thing, to give your set some flavor. I think you were really great, I hope your ok with constructive criticism. Its really brave putting this out there, because you really opening yourself up! I love comedy that isn't dirty! God Bless You!

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Re: My Stand Up Comedy

Postby LAVA89 » Sun May 03, 2015 10:26 pm

I like your character, the goofy quick wit. You should totally keep that..
Good to know! As many have said that most of the battle in stand up comedy is about building a funny character.
however you need to pronunciation a bit better, because I had to rewind to pick up some of your words... I thought your jokes were great!
Ok, were there any specific parts in the set that you had trouble with? I know I do slur my words from time to time and knowing which ones would be a big help. Thanks for bringing this up!
I hope your ok with constructive criticism. Its really brave putting this out there, because you really opening yourself up!
I definitely accept constructive criticism, as it can only help me get better!
I love comedy that isn't dirty! God Bless You!

Same here! God Bless you as well!
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