"Stargate: Atlantis" Spec Script

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"Stargate: Atlantis" Spec Script

Post by selderane »

I thought it would be nifty to post a spec I wrote in 2008 when I had dreams of writing Stargate episodes. I think it's good I can see a lot I'd go back and rewrite, but there's a fair bit more I still enjoy. I'm pretty proud of this thing.

This episode would have taken place during season four. I wrote it in Final Draft.

TEASER:
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                              STARGATE: ATLANTIS
                                     "Vengeance"



                                       TEASER

                                                               FADE IN:

               EXT. FOREST CLEARING - DAY

               TEYLA and RONON are pinned down behind a small mound of LOGS
               and ROCKS in the middle of a CLEARING.  BLUE ENERGY BLASTS
               fly around them, all seeming near misses.  Popping out from
               behind TREES we see 6 MEN taking shots at our two heroes.

                                   TEYLA
                         We cannot remain here for much
                         longer.

                                   RONON
                         You see a way out?

                                   TEYLA
                             (resigned)
                         No.  We were lucky to find cover
                         here.  There is no guarantee we
                         would be so lucky again.

                                   RONON
                         Good thing I don't rely on luck.

               Ronon pops up and squeezes off two shots from his weapon
               before falling back to the ground.  The man Ronon shot at
               takes cover behind his tree again letting it absorb the
               impact.

                                   RONON (CONT'D)
                         Did I hit him?

                                   TEYLA
                         No.  He took cover.

                                   RONON
                         Lucky.

                                   TEYLA
                         Would you mind if I call for
                         support now?

               A shot from the bad guys hits near Ronon, covering him in
               tree splinters.

                                   RONAN
                             (deadpan)
                         Feel free.

               INT. STARGATE OPERATIONS - DAY

               SHEPPARD is zipping up his field vest when 6 MARINES come up
               to him.  The stargate has already been dialed up and shimmers
               like a pool of water.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         We got two of our own taking heavy
                         fire.  They have cover but it won't
                         last and they're two klicks from
                         the gate.  So we double-time it to
                         them.  Any questions?

               The marines are motionless but seem eager to get through the
               gate.  Sheppard chambers a round into his P-90.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Strong silent types.  I like that.
                             (beat)
                         Let's go!

               Sheppard turns and steps into the event horizon.

               PLAY WORMHOLE TRAVEL STOCK FOOTAGE

               EXT. FOREST - DAY

               ON STARGATE

               Sheppard steps out of the stargate event horizon, closely
               followed by the 6 marines that met with him earlier.  They
               file out past him and take up defensive positions around the
               gate.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Sheppard moves away from the gate and taps his headset radio.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (into radio)
                         Teyla, Ronon, come in, over.

                                   TEYLA
                             (over radio)
                         John, it is good to hear your
                         voice.

               Over the radio, behind Teyla's voice we hear rapid energy
               blasts.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (into radio)
                         Yeah, yours too.  What's your
                         status?

                                                              INTERCUT:

               EXT. FOREST CLEARING - DAY

               Ronon comes down onto the ground HARD, followed by numerous
               BLUE ENERGY BLASTS.  He's grinning widely.

                                   TEYLA
                         Sheppard requests a status update.

                                   RONON
                         We're just a having some fun,
                         that's all.

                                   TEYLA
                             (into radio)
                         Did you get that?

               Sheppard rolls his eyes and moves forward, motioning for the
               marines to follow.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (into radio)
                         I got that.  Keep your head down. 
                         I've got a team of marines with me
                         and we're coming to you.

               Teyla sits still while Ronon does his best to keep the bad
               guys at bay.  This usually means firing blindly over his
               shoulder or popping up and down quickly to try to get off a
               lucky shot.

                                   TEYLA
                             (into radio)
                         We'll be here.

                                   RONON
                         How far out are they?

                                   TEYLA
                         Sheppard did not say.  They cannot
                         be far from the stargate.

                                   RONON
                         We have to do something.

                                   TEYLA
                         Is that wise?  We're outnumbered
                         and our cover is poor as it is.

                                   RONON
                         It's not going to take long for
                         them to realize we can't move and
                         they position themselves to flank
                         us.

                                   TEYLA
                         What is it you suggest?

                                   RONON
                         What is it Sheppard says about a
                         good defense?

                                   TEYLA
                         Sheppard says a lot of things that
                         do not make sense.

               The grin on Ronon's face tells Teyla there's no convincing
               him otherwise.  It doesn't make things any better that he's
               probably right.  Then, at that moment, the firing stops. 
               Ronon peeks through a gap in their cover and

               RONON'S POV

               sees a man gesturing wildly, telling his men to move out.

               BACK TO SCENE

                                   TEYLA (CONT'D)
                         What do you see?

                                   RONON
                         They're moving to flank.  It's now
                         or we die.

                                   TEYLA
                         Okay.  I'll cover you.

               Ronon and Teyla come up out of their cover and open fire. 
               Ronon takes out the man giving the gestures in a single shot. 
               He swings his gun around in time to see another man take aim
               at Teyla.  He grabs her shoulder in an attempt to move her
               from danger.

                                   RONON
                         Get down!

               It's too late.  Teyla takes a BLUE ENERGY SHOT directly to
               her chest. 
               The kinetic energy throws her back and into Ronon.  Ronon
               catches himself, and Teyla, and takes out the man that shot
               Teyla with a shot of his own.  But the odds are too great
               against and Ronon takes two BLUE ENERGY BLASTS - one to his
               chest and another to his spine.  His expression falls and his
               body follows.

                                                         MOMENTS LATER:

               EXT. FOREST CLEARING - DAY

               Sheppard and his marines come upon the clearing Ronon and
               Teyla were holed up.  They see 4 MEN in the center standing
               over something.  One of the men is crouched down, attending
               to something on the ground.

               Sheppard motions for the marines to circle the position. 
               Once the marines are where they need to be Sheppard radios
               Teyla.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (whispering into radio)
                         Teyla, we're in position, what's
                         your status?

               There's no answer.  Sheppard curses under his breath and
               checks his cover before calling out to the strange men.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         You are surrounded.  Put down your-

               He can't finish the sentence before the 4 men open fire into
               the forest.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Take them down!

               Together Sheppard and the marines make short work of the
               remaining men.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                             (motioning)
                         Check your fire!  Check your fire!

               There's no movement in the clearing.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Move forward!

               Everyone comes out from their cover and into the clearing. 
               Sheppard addresses a marine near him.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Check the bodies.

               The marine complies and goes off.  Sheppard keeps his gaze
               out into the forest.

                                   MARINE 1
                         Medic!

               Sheppard turns as another marine rushes to the first marine's
               position.  The medic quickly gets to work on a body. 
               Sheppard moves to his position.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         What is it?

               The medic looks up, his face like stone.

                                   MARINE MEDIC
                         I'm sorry, sir.  They're gone.

               ANGLE ON TEYLA AND RONON

               The medic pulls his fingers away from Teyla's neck.  Teyla
               and Ronon both, their bodies, are limp and lifeless.

               BACK TO SCENE

               On Sheppard's expression we...

                                                              FADE OUT.


                                                END OF TEASER
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   ACT 1

                                                               FADE IN:

               MAIN TITLES

               EXT. FOREST CLEARING - DAY

               A FULL MEDICAL TEAM from Atlantis is on the scene.  As well
               as more marines.  DR. KELLER is talking to some of her staff
               then comes over to Sheppard, who is keeping to himself off to
               the side, his face pained.

                                   KELLER
                         Colonel?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Any news?

                                   KELLER
                         No, I'm sorry.  I'm sure we'll
                         learn more back on Atlantis.
                             (beat)
                         Their clothes are burned where...

               She sees Sheppard's expression and let's her voice trail off.

                                   KELLER (CONT'D)
                         I'm sorry, John.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (sharply)
                         Yeah, I'm hearing that a lot
                         lately, Doc.

               Keller, feeling the rebuke, pulls back and turns to walk
               away.  Sheppard realizes his mistake and is quick to stop
               Keller from leaving.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         I'm sorry.  That wasn't fair. 
                         You're just trying to help and
                         I'm... being an ***.

                                   KELLER
                         No, it's okay.  I know you were
                         close to both of them.  Many people
                         on Atlantis were.  This won't be
                         easy for anyone.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Right.  I know.

                                   KELLER
                             (carefully)
                         Listen, John, if you need to
                         talk...

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Thanks but I wouldn't bother you
                         like-

                                   KELLER
                         Me?  Oh, no, I wasn't talking about
                         me.  There's Doctor-

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Heightmeyer, right!

                                   KELLER
                         I mean, if you wanted to talk to me
                         I'd be fine with it.  I don't mind. 
                         I just thought you might be more
                         comfortable... with a professional.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         You're right.  You're absolutely
                         right.  I'll think about that. 
                         Thanks.

                                   KELLER
                         Okay.  Good.
                             (beat)
                         My team and I are heading back. 
                         Anything I should tell Colonel
                         Carter?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         We're going to do a search of the
                         immediate area, see if anything
                         turns up.

                                   KELLER
                         What about the village?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Teyla said her people knew them.  I
                         think it would be best if we talk
                         to a few Athosians before we hit
                         the village.
                             (beat)
                         She might not have known them as
                         well as she thought.

                                   KELLER
                         Right.  That's a good idea.
                             (concerned)
                         See you on Atlantis later then?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Yeah.  I don't want to be here
                         longer than I have to.

               Keller walks away leaving Sheppard to his thoughts.

                                                        SOMETIME LATER:

               EXT. FOREST - DAY (WITH SHEPPARD)

               Sheppard is walking through the forest letting the nose of
               his P-90 lead the way.  His eyes dart back and forth scouring
               the ground for near-invisible details that might give him a
               clue as to what happened and why.

                                   MARINE 1
                             (over radio)
                         Colonel Sheppard come in, over.

               Sheppard takes a knee, tree defending his back, and clicks on
               his headset.  He never averts his gaze from the horizon -
               ever watchful.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (into radio)
                         This is Sheppard.  What have you
                         got?

               EXT. FOREST - DAY (WITH MARINE)

               The marine is standing away from the body of one of the men
               that was attacking Teyla and Ronon.  Another marine is
               inspecting the corpse.

                                   MARINE 1
                             (into radio)
                         We've found a body a few hundred
                         yards from the battle site.  Looks
                         like he took a hit and crawled
                         away.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (over radio)
                         What hit him?

                                   MARINE 1
                             (into radio)
                         An energy weapon. 
                         The size of the hole reminds me of
                         Ronon's hand cannon.
                             (beat)
                         But if this guy made it this far
                         out we don't know if anyone else
                         could be out here.  Or how many.

               EXT. FOREST - DAY (WITH SHEPPARD)

               Sheppard considers his options then decides a course of
               action.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (into radio)
                         Okay, get your team together and
                         get back to Atlantis.  I'm going to
                         look around some more.
                             (beat)
                         Tell Colonel Carter I'll be back in
                         an hour.  Sheppard out.

               With that Sheppard moves on.

                                                                 LATER:

               EXT. FOREST - DAY (WITH SHEPPARD)

               Through a NUMBER OF CUTS we follow Sheppard making his way
               through the forest as quietly, but quickly, as he can until
               he reaches the edge.

               SHEPPARD'S POV

               In the DISTANCE we can make out a small village.  Several
               PLUMES OF SMOKE are rising from it.  It could just be from
               mundane sources, or evidence of something more sinister.  We
               can't tell from this vantage.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Sheppard considers his options as we...

                                                               FADE TO:

               EXT. ATLANTIS - DAY

               The ocean laps lazily at the edges of the city on this
               beautiful sunny day.

                                                                CUT TO:

               INT. ATLANTIS - MEDICAL BAY

               CRANE SHOT FROM ABOVE COMING DOWN

               MEDICAL TECHNICIANS are moving equipment around as quickly as
               they can muster while six bodies are wheeled in on gurneys by
               marines.

                                   KELLER (O.S.)
                         No, I want those two over...

               CRANE TURNS ONTO KELLER

               Keller is the last into the room, squeezing past a marine
               moving the gurney with Teyla on it, and pulls back a curtain
               revealing a small, clean workspace.

                                   KELLER
                         I want Teyla and Ronon over here.

               The MARINES comply and roll them both into the space then
               leave.

                                   KELLER (CONT'D)
                         Thank you.

               A medical technician approaches Keller.

                                   MED TECH
                         Doctor Keller, what do you want us
                         to do with the others?

                                   KELLER
                         Go over them with a fine toothed
                         comb.  If there's anything on them
                         that might tell us what happened we
                         need to find it.  Check their
                         blood, check their clothes, check
                         their DNA, hair, fingers and toes. 
                         Check everything.  This takes top
                         priority.

               The med tech nods and goes off to a huddled group of other
               med techs and passes on the orders.  Keller turns and regards
               Teyla and Ronon's bodies.

                                   KELLER (CONT'D)
                             (to herself)
                         This takes top priority.

                                                               FADE TO:

               INT. STARGATE OPERATIONS - CARTER'S OFFICE

               A marine is standing at ease in front of CARTER'S desk and
               she herself is standing.  MCKAY enters as she dismisses the
               marine.

                                   CARTER
                         Thank you.  You're dismissed.

               The marine snaps off a crisp salute, one Cater returns, and
               turns on his heel and exits past McKay who offers a quick
               greeting.

                                   MCKAY
                         Hey.

               The marine doesn't reply and moves on.

                                   MCKAY (CONT'D)
                         What's his problem?

                                   CARTER
                         He's taking it pretty hard, that's
                         all.

                                   MCKAY
                             (puzzled)
                         Taking what hard?

                                   CARTER
                         You haven't heard?

                                   MCKAY
                         Heard what?
                             (beat)
                         I've been trying this sensory
                         depravation exercise I read about
                         awhile back and I have to tell you
                         it's really remarkable.
                             (beat)
                         You see, you shut out all external
                         sensory input for short periods of
                         time and it's supposed to help
                         focus the mind.
                             (beat)
                         Of course it has to be for really,
                         really short periods of time
                         because, as I'm sure you know, it
                         is a means of torture and will
                         cause even the most strong willed
                         people to blubber like a baby in no
                         time at all.  But I'm fairly
                         certain in short sessions it may-

               Carter puts her hand up to stop him.

                                   CARTER
                         McKay...

                                   MCKAY
                         Hmm?

                                   CARTER
                             (gently)
                         It's Ronon and Teyla.

                                   MCKAY
                             (oblivious)
                         What about them?

                                   CARTER
                         They were attacked, Rodney.  They
                         didn't make it.

                                   MCKAY
                             (laughing)
                         You are talking about our Ronon and
                         Teyla, right?
                             (motioning)
                         You know, the big guy with the big
                         arms, carries a big gun.  And the
                         plucky girl... hits hard.

                                   CARTER
                         I'm sorry, McKay.  Sheppard and his
                         team got there too late to do
                         anything.

               McKay is stunned into silence and takes a seat.

                                   MCKAY
                         Oh my God.  I, I can't believe
                         this.
                             (beat)
                         Do you know how?

                                   CARTER
                         Doctor Keller is going over
                         their... them now.  She'll report
                         her findings as soon as she's found
                         something.

                                   MCKAY
                         Sheppard?

                                   CARTER
                         He's still in the field.

                                   MCKAY
                         Oh.  Right.
                             (wryly)
                         First Carson now Teyla and Ronon. 
                         Not a long life expectancy here,
                         huh?

                                   CARTER
                             (sympathetic)
                         Rodney...

                                   MCKAY
                         Would you look at that?  I made a
                         joke.  Not a good joke, yes, but a
                         joke nonetheless.  Humor can be a
                         form of denial so I guess I'm right
                         on schedule with that whole grief
                         thing.

                                   CARTER
                         Do you want me to contact Doctor
                         Heightmeyer?

                                   MCKAY
                         No, no... that's okay.  I know
                         where to find her.  We go back. 
                         Had a woman in me once.  Well, not
                         in me but her consciousness in my
                         mind.  It was unnerving but I think
                         I took away something positive from
                         the experience.
                             (beat)
                         You know I kissed Carson, right? 
                         Well, it wasn't me, it was her, but
                         it was still my body.

                                   CARTER
                         Rodney.

                                   MCKAY
                         Right.  There I go again.  More of
                         that denial bit.  Keep talking and
                         maybe it won't be real.  I get it.

                                   CARTER
                         If you need anything you know you
                         only have to ask.

               OFF SCREEN we hear the stargate dialing up.

                                   CARTER (CONT'D)
                         That's should be Sheppard and his
                         team.  I'm sure he'd like to see a
                         friendly face.

                                   MCKAY
                         Me?  Oh, right.

               McKay and Carter leave the office and...

                                                              TRACKING:

               INT. STARGATE OPERATIONS

               We follow them into Stargate Operations proper.

               ON STARGATE

               The last symbol lights and the event horizon forms in the
               sideways flush we've all seen.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Carter and McKay walk up behind a MAN OPERATING the stargate
               controls.

                                   CARTER
                         Sheppard?

                                   OPERATOR
                         His team.

                                   CARTER
                         What do you mean?  Where's
                         Sheppard?

                                   OPERATOR
                         You should ask them.

               ON STARGATE

               Sheppard's marine team exits the gate and it disengages as
               soon as the last soldier is back.

               SWISH PAN TO STAIRS UP TO STARGATE OPERATIONS

               Carter and McKay both come down the stairs and stop in front
               of the MARINE TEAM.

                                   CARTER
                         Report, Lieutenant.

                                   MARINE 1
                         We found another body out there,
                         Ma'am.  Looked like he took a hit
                         from Ronon's weapon and crawled
                         away but given we don't know how
                         many hostiles were engaged in the
                         battle Colonel Sheppard ordered us
                         back to Atlantis.

                                   MCKAY
                         That sounds smart.

                                   CARTER
                         The Colonel's status?

                                   MARINE 1
                         He said he was going to investigate
                         further and be back in an hour.
                             (looks at watch)
                         That was 10 minutes ago.

                                   CARTER
                         Thank you, Lieutenant.  You and
                         your men are dismissed.

               The marine nods and he and his men file past and OFF SCREEN.

                                   CARTER (CONT'D)
                             (to Operator)
                         Dial up Sheppard.  I want to know
                         what he's doing.

               The operator nods and OFF SCREEN we HEAR the stargate being
               dialed.

               EXT. VILLAGE - AFTERNOON

               ESTABLISHING WIDE ON VILLAGE

               It's the same village Sheppard spotted earlier, but with more
               PLUMES OF SMOKE.

               INT. VILLAGE - AFTERNOON

               Sheppard is darting between small huts trying to avoid being
               seen.  It's rather easy as there doesn't appear to be anyone
               around.  Doors to huts are wide open and various objects,
               baskets, tables, chairs, et al, are strewn about the ground
               like a riot just cleared out.

               CRANE ON VILLAGE SQUARE FROM ABOVE.

               There's a roaring fire in the center of the wide open square. 
               To the LEFT OF FRAME we see Sheppard, P-90 at the ready,
               sneaking up on the edge of a hut, just hidden from view.

               TIGHT ON SHEPPARD

               He raises his weapon to aim and peeks around the corner.

               SHEPPARD'S POV

               Nothing.  It's like a ghost town.  Tumbleweed blowing through
               would almost seem appropriate.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Sheppard moves back to the cover of the hut and looks lost
               for a moment before his radio goes off.

                                   CARTER
                             (over radio)
                         Sheppard, this is Atlantis, please
                         report.

               Sheppard gets a look on his face like he's just been caught
               with his hand in the cookie jar.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (into radio)
                         Atlantis, this is Sheppard, nothing
                         to report at the moment. 
                         Everything is quiet.

                                                              INTERCUT:

               INT. STARGATE OPERATIONS

               Carter is standing next to the operator and looking out into
               the empty space between herself and the stargate.  McKay is
               listening intently.

                                   CARTER
                         Your team arrived just a few
                         moments ago.  They tell me you
                         ordered them back because of
                         possible hostiles in the area.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (over speakers)
                         That is correct.

                                   CARTER
                         And you thought it was safe for you
                         to stay back.  Alone?  Please
                         explain that to me, Colonel.

               Sheppard, growing desperate for an excuse, looks around and
               his gaze falls to the ground.

               ON GROUND AT SHEPPARD'S FEET

               There's a large log and clumps of dry leaves and other
               debris.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Sheppard crouches down and take a pile of leaves into his
               hands and begins rolling it in his palms near the microphone
               of his radio.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (into radio)
                         Atlantis... signal... up... please
                         repeat... can't...

               The noise on Atlantis' end sounds like some kind of
               interference but McKay looks more puzzled than anyone else.

                                   CARTER
                             (to Operator)
                         What is that?

                                   OPERATOR
                         Seems like some kind of
                         interference but it's not
                         originating on our end.

                                   MCKAY
                             (motioning)
                         It sounds like he's crunching dry
                         leaves or something next to the
                         transmitter.

               Carter's face goes red.  McKay sees her reaction and realizes
               that's exactly what Sheppard is doing and Carter knows it.

                                   MCKAY (CONT'D)
                         He's crunching leaves next to the
                         transmitter.  That's mature.

                                   CARTER
                         Colonel Sheppard, whatever you're
                         trying to do will only succeed in
                         getting you killed.

               Sheppard is still crouched and rubbing leaves in his palms
               near his microphone when he hears A COMMOTION around the
               corner, toward the village square.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (into radio - quickly)
                         Not receiving... try... hours.

               Sheppard clicks off his radio and peeks around the corner.

               SHEPPARD'S POV

               He sees a LARGE MAN, wearing similar clothing as the men that
               killed Teyla and Ronon, chasing A BOY no older than 12
               through the village square.  And they're coming right in his
               direction.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Sheppard looks at his P-90 then decides against using the
               weapon.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Crap.

               He glances back then looks around again for options.  He
               spots the log and picks it up, testing its weight.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Yes.  This should work.

               He presses up hard against the side of the hut and readies
               the log.  Shortly, the boy rounds the corner and Sheppard
               sticks out his foot to trip him.  The boy tumbles to the
               ground and with all his strength Sheppard swings the log into
               the face of the boy's assailant.

               The man doesn't stand a chance and is instantly knocked out. 
               While Sheppard is making sure the man is out the boy recovers
               and is scrambling to his feet.  Sheppard quickly goes to him
               and pulls him up by an arm.  The boy starts screaming and
               flailing.

                                   EDORAS
                         Let go of me!  Let go of me!

               He lands a solid kick onto Sheppard's shin.  Sheppard jumps
               but doesn't lose grip of the boy.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (harshly)
                         Will you stop that!  Do you want
                         everyone to find you?

               Edoras calms and regards Sheppard cautiously.

                                   EDORAS
                         You're not one of them?  You're not
                         going to take me?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         If I were why would I take that guy
                         out?  Right?

                                   EDORAS
                         Right...

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Good.  If I let go are you gonna
                         stay put?

               Edoras nods.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Okay.

               Sheppard lets go and watches the kid for a moment expecting
               him to bolt.  When he doesn't he turns his attention to his
               own wounded shin.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         That hurt.

                                   EDORAS
                             (regarding the knocked out
                              man)
                         I thought you were one of them.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Who are they?

                                   EDORAS
                         You don't know?  They're
                         everywhere.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Well, I get around.  Can't seem to
                         stay in one place to long.
                             (beat)
                         So?

                                   EDORAS
                         They're slave traders.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         What?

                                   EDORAS
                         We came to this world a few
                         generations ago trying to escape
                         them.  We thought we made it far
                         enough.  That they wouldn't find
                         us.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         So they took everyone in your
                         village?

                                   EDORAS
                         No, not everyone.  A lot escaped
                         into the forest.  But my family did
                         not.  And some other families.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Slavers.  Great.

                                   EDORAS
                             (excited)
                         You have to help!  You have to save
                         them!  There isn't much time.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Whoa there fella.  I don't know
                         what you think but dropping one
                         thug chasing a kid is a lot
                         different then taking on bunch of
                         guys with guns.

                                   EDORAS
                         But if they get off the planet I'll
                         never see them again.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Listen, I have people that can
                         help.  If we can get to the
                         stargate I-

                                   EDORAS
                         It'll be too late.  If they get
                         back to the other traders they'll
                         come in more ships.  They'll find
                         everyone.  Can your people stop all
                         of them?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Well I don't know about that...

                                   EDORAS
                             (resigned)
                         Then we're all dead.  It would have
                         been better if you let him take me.

               Edoras goes to walk away but Sheppard grabs his arm again.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Fine.  I'll see what I can do.

                                   EDORAS
                         Really!?

               CLOSE ON SHEPPARD'S FACE

               He knows what he's about to do is wildly stupid but he
               doesn't see another option.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Yeah.  Really.

                                                              FADE OUT.



                                    END OF ACT 1
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ACT 2

                                                               FADE IN:

               EXT. ATLANTIS - DAY

               We PUSH IN on Atlantis' CENTRAL TOWER on whatever level the
               MEDICAL BAY is until it takes up the ENTIRE FRAME.

               INT. ATLANTIS - MEDICAL BAY

               Keller is in the room with the bodies of Teyla and Ronon and
               she's wearing full surgical scrubs.  There is ELECTRONIC
               MONITORING EQUIPMENT on the one side of the bed Teyla is on
               and Keller is on the opposite.  She's running a SCANNER over
               Teyla's body and watching a MONITOR that is tracking her
               movements with the scanner, feeding her information.  Keller
               is speaking aloud her findings to an unseen recorder.

                                   KELLER
                         Initial scans show no signs of
                         lacerations or blunt trauma.  All
                         organs appear healthy and free from
                         infection.  There is singeing to
                         the clothing of the subject...

               Keller pauses and takes a moment to keep her welling emotions
               in check.

                                   KELLER (CONT'D)
                         Teyla's clothing is damaged in a
                         pattern consistent with taking an
                         energy discharge to the breast.

               ANGLE ABOVE TEYLA'S BODY

               Keller parts the damaged clothing just enough to reveal the
               damage underneath.  Nothing more is exposed to preserve the
               woman's dignity.

               BACK TO SCENE

                                   KELLER (CONT'D)
                         Skin directly under damaged
                         portions of clothing shows slight
                         reddening and swelling that further
                         supports cause of death being the
                         result of an energy discharge.

               Keller straightens up then, very gently, covers the exposed
               skin back over.

                                   KELLER (CONT'D)
                         Pause recording.

               A quick CHIRP tells us it has been done.  Keller pulls over a
               small stool and takes a seat next to her friend.

               ANGLE ON KELLER AND TEYLA FROM THE SIDE

               Keller reaches over and brushes a few strands of hair from
               Teyla's face and then the dam breaks.  She cries out and
               buries her face next to Teyla's.

               ANGLE ABOVE THEM BOTH, PULLING BACK WIDE

               Keller looks incredibly alone.  Her muffled tears fade as
               we...

                                                               FADE TO:

               INT. VILLAGE - AFTERNOON

               Sheppard is letting Edoras lead the way between HUTS and
               behind COVER, when it's available, toward an unknown
               destination.  Edoras is about to leave the cover of an
               OVERTURNED CART just as Sheppard reaches him.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (whispering)
                         Hey, not so fast.

                                   EDORAS
                         They might see us.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         That's why we take it slow.  If
                         they're gonna shoot at us I'd like
                         to be while we're behind some
                         cover.

                                   EDORAS
                         If we don't get there in time-

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I get that.  But we're not getting
                         anywhere if we're dead, right?
                             (beat)
                         Where are we going anyway? 
                         Shouldn't we be heading into the
                         forest?

                                   EDORAS
                         We will but we need something
                         first.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         What?

                                   EDORAS
                         Follow me.

               Before Sheppard can protest Edoras is off.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Wait... stupid kid.
                             (looking around)
                         Gonna get us shot.

               ABOVE VILLAGE LOOKING TOWARD A HUT

               Edoras darts in.  Sheppard isn't so brash.  He checks his
               rear quickly then heads in, P-90 leading the way.

               INT. EDORAS' FAMILY HUT

               It's small but colorful, decorated in throw rugs and other
               items of cultural significance.  Edoras is trying to slide a
               LARGE CHEST away from the wall but is having problems. 
               Sheppard does a quick once over of the area then turns his
               ire toward Edoras.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Are you trying to get us shot?

                                   EDORAS
                         I couldn't leave...

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (suspicious)
                         Couldn't leave what?

               Edoras simply can't move the chest but doesn't ask for help.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         What are you doing?

                                   EDORAS
                         She's under here.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         She?

                                   EDORAS
                         My sister.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         What!?

               Sheppard rushes over and with some effort moves the chest
               away.

               ANGLE ON SPACE UNDER CHEST

               There are some boards clearly out of place amongst the rest
               of the floor.  A hidden compartment.  Edoras quickly goes to
               his knees and starts pulling them up.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Edoras finished his work and slowly comes to his feet.  He's
               holding a BABY wrapped in a blanket.

               ANGLE ON BABY

               Her eyes are wide and bright blue.  She's blinks a few times
               then her gaze locks on Edoras and she laughs.

               BACK TO SCENE

                                   EDORAS
                         My sister, Lalaith.

               On Sheppard's expression of disbelief we...

                                                                CUT TO:

               INT. ATLANTIS - MEDICAL BAY

               Keller is wiping her face with a warm damp towel when McKay
               comes in.

                                   MCKAY
                         Hey.

               Keller pulls away the towel and we see her eyes are puffy and
               red.  She sniffs and uses the towel to wipe her nose quickly.

                                   MCKAY (CONT'D)
                         Are you okay?

                                   KELLER
                         I guess.  As well as anyone I
                         suppose.
                             (beat)
                         You?

                                   MCKAY
                         Me?  Oh, I'm still well into
                         denial.  Numb and everything.  I'm
                         sure I'll cry like a little girl
                         later but...

               McKay catches Keller giving him a look.

                                   MCKAY (CONT'D)
                         Not that crying like a girl is a
                         bad thing.  No, I mean, we should
                         all cry like girls from time to
                         time.  I'm sure it's...
                         therapeutic.

                                   KELLER
                         Uh-huh.

               Keller throws the towel in a bin then goes over to a table
               full of impressive-looking Ancient medical things.  McKay
               follows.

                                   MCKAY
                         I came down here to see if you
                         found anything.  I wasn't able to
                         help upstairs so I figured I'd see
                         what's up down here.

                                   KELLER
                         Upstairs?  Something going on?

                                   MCKAY
                         Oh, yeah, you don't know.
                             (beat)
                         Sheppard's gone all "lone wolf" it
                         looks like.  Even went so far as to
                         try to disguise his attempt to
                         ignore us as interference.

                                   KELLER
                         How could you tell?

                                   MCKAY
                         It was simple enough to figure out
                         if you heard the sound.  Very
                         television.

                                   KELLER
                         Uh-huh.

                                   MCKAY
                         So, ummm, you find anything with
                         Teyla and Ronon?

               Keller pushes a quick sequence in on an Ancient terminal and
               BIOLOGICAL READINGS for both come up on a MONITOR.

                                   KELLER
                         Teyla's on the left, Ronon on the
                         right. 
                         Nothing out of the ordinary
                         biologically.  Both in perfect
                         health.

               McKay takes an interest in Ronon's readout.  He points at a
               few places then turns back to Keller.

                                   MCKAY
                         These marks, what are they?

                                   KELLER
                         Healed breaks and fractures. 
                         Ronon's got the skeletal structure
                         of a linebacker.  But it's nothing
                         recent or unaccounted for.

                                   MCKAY
                         Right.  Where did they get hit?

               Keller pushes a few more buttons and the areas hit are lit
               with a RED RETICULE.

                                   KELLER
                         Teyla took one hit to the chest. 
                         Ronon one to the front and back.

                                   MCKAY
                         Two to take the big guy down, huh?

               McKay smiles for a brief moment but the moment fades.

                                   KELLER
                         It would seem.

                                   MCKAY
                         Anything else?

                                   KELLER
                         No.  Nothing.  They're clean
                         otherwise.

               At that moment a medical technician approaches Keller.

                                   MED TECH
                         Doctor?  We've found something on
                         one of the dead men brought in.

                                   KELLER
                         What is it?

               The med tech leads Keller, McKay in tow, to the bed of a dead
               man torn apart from ballistic fire.  Beside him, on a small
               table, are the few trinkets he was carrying. 
               What's of interest is a SMALL BLUE DEVICE.  The med tech
               picks up the device and hands it to Keller.

                                   MED TECH
                         This.

               Keller looks it over.

                                   KELLER
                         I've never seen anything like it.
                             (hands it to McKay)
                         You?

                                   MCKAY
                         No.  It's not Ancient.  And it
                         doesn't look like anything from
                         anyone we've come across before.

                                   KELLER
                         Another technologically advanced
                         race?

                                   MCKAY
                         I'd think when I said "it doesn't
                         look like anything from anyone
                         we've come across before" that
                         would be clear.
                             (beat)
                         Can I take this?

               Before Keller can answer McKay takes off.

                                   KELLER
                             (resigned)
                         Sure, go right ahead, be my guest
                         why don't you.

               EXT. ATLANTIS - DAY

               Three PUDDLE JUMPERS come into frame from the right and take
               a course straight for Atlantis.

                                   CARTER (V.O.)
                         An "on/off" switch?

               INT. ATLANTIS - DIAGNOSTICS LAB

               McKay and ZELENKA are both standing next to an Ancient
               SCANNING ARRAY while Carter is a few feet back.  SCIENTISTS
               work on their own projects in the BACKGROUND.

                                   ZELENKA
                         A lot like a garage door opener. 
                         It looks to have only two
                         functions.  To send a command to
                         turn something on then-

                                   CARTER
                         I know how a garage door opener
                         works.

                                   ZELENKA
                         Yes, or course.  But that is all it
                         appears to do.  Our scanning
                         equipment detected nothing beyond
                         those base commands within its
                         subroutines.

                                   CARTER
                         Do we know what it turns on and
                         off?

                                   MCKAY
                         Not really, no.  It appears to have
                         a very short range so we don't
                         think it would act as a detonator
                         or distress signal.

                                   CARTER
                         How short are we talking?

                                   ZELENKA
                         A few dozen feet.  Line of sight
                         seems most likely.

                                   CARTER
                         Not much you could do with it.

                                   MCKAY
                         Activate a shield, turn on or off a
                         security system... it's hard to
                         say.

                                   CARTER
                         But what would the men that
                         attacked Teyla and Ronon be doing
                         with it?

                                   ZELENKA
                         Maybe they have a base or ship
                         nearby?

                                   CARTER
                         If that's true then Sheppard is
                         going to run into more company then
                         he can probably handle.

               Carter activates her headset and issues orders.

                                   CARTER (CONT'D)
                             (into headset)
                         I need two marine teams outfitted
                         in combat gear and assembled at the
                         stargate in five minutes.  And dial
                         Sheppard.  He's not alone.

               INT. EDORAS' FAMILY HUT

               Sheppard is pacing while Edoras cradles his sister.

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (to himself)
                         This isn't good.  Taking a kid is
                         bad enough but there's no way we
                         can take a baby.

                                   EDORAS
                         I couldn't leave her alone.  I was
                         coming for her when that man you
                         hit found me.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I guess there's a bright side to
                         this.

                                   EDORAS
                         What?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         You're not coming with me.

                                   EDORAS
                         I have to!  I have to find my
                         family!

                                   SHEPPARD
                         You did.  Now you have to protect
                         her.  You can't come with me and do
                         that.
                             (beat)
                         You said some of your village ran
                         into the forest.  Do you know
                         where?

               Edoras nods.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Good go to them.  You're better off
                         there.

                                   EDORAS
                         What about you?  How will you find
                         their ship?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I think it's safe to assume they're
                         not far.  No sense dragging a bunch
                         of slaves for miles if you can
                         avoid it, right?  Do you know where
                         they landed?

               Edoras doesn't answer.  He doesn't like the idea of staying
               behind.  Sheppard detects his anger and is sympathetic.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                             (taking a knee)
                         I know you want to come.  You want
                         some revenge.  These people that
                         took your family, they killed two
                         of my friends.  I'm going to make
                         sure they suffer.  Don't worry
                         about that.  But your sister is who
                         you need to worry about now.  Ask
                         yourself what your parents would
                         do.

                                   EDORAS
                         They'd protect us.  They'd go into
                         the forest.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         And that's what you need to do. 
                         Okay?

                                   EDORAS
                         Okay.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Good.  Now which way do I need to
                         go?

               Edoras points in a direction.

                                   EDORAS
                         That way.  They came from over
                         there.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Great.
                             (beat)
                         What are you going to do now?

                                   EDORAS
                         Take Lalaith and go into the forest
                         with the rest of my village.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         That's a good kid.

               Sheppard scruffs Edoras' hair.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         Get out of here and be careful. 
                         Being quiet is more important than
                         speed right now, got it?

                                   EDORAS
                         Yes... You never told me your name.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I didn't?  Huh, that's weird.  My
                         name is John.

                                   EDORAS
                         I'm Edoras.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Well, I'm glad to have met you,
                         Edoras.  Now get out of here.

               Edoras nods then EXITS the hut.  Sheppard takes one last look
               around then does the same.

                                                              TRACKING:

               EXT. EDORAS' FAMILY HUT - AFTERNOON

               The moment Sheppard steps out of the hut A LOG comes flying
               at his face.  Sheppard moves to the side just in time to
               avoid taking it to the nose but it clips his left ear and
               rips the headset away.  Sheppard rolls and turns and sees
               it's the same man he clubbed earlier, complete with broken
               nose.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         You again?

               The man readies his log and Sheppard responds by pulling up
               his P-90.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         I wouldn't.

               The man considers his options for a moment then a SNAP OF A
               STICK from off to the side momentarily distracts Sheppard. 
               The man makes his move and goes to fling the log at Sheppard
               but it's too late.  Sheppard sees the move and opens up with
               a quick burst from his P-90.  The man falls dead in clump of
               torn flesh.  Sheppard then turns his attention back to the
               sound of the snapping stick.  He sidesteps around the hut and
               sees Edoras there shielding his sister.  Sheppard lets out a
               haggard breath and lowers his weapon.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         I thought I told you to get out of
                         here!

                                   EDORAS
                         I was when I heard footsteps.  When
                         I looked, that man was back.  I was
                         going to warn you but...

                                   SHEPPARD
                         It's fine.  The noise you made let
                         him do something stupid.  Can you
                         get out of here now?

                                   EDORAS
                         Yes.  I will.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Good.

               Edoras takes off a bit then stops and turns.

                                   EDORAS
                         John?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Yeah?

                                   EDORAS
                         Thank you.

               Sheppard smiles then shoos Edoras off with his hand.  The boy
               smiles then disappears into the forest.

               ANGLE ON SHEPPARD'S DAMAGED HEADSET

               It's laying on the ground in two pieces.  It's completely
               worthless.  An approaching shadow DARKENS the frame.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Sheppard is looking down at his damaged equipment and sighs.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Dammit.

               He takes a quick look around, shakes his head, then goes off
               in the direction Edoras pointed.

               INT. STARGATE OPERATIONS

               Carter is standing next to the operator and trying to raise
               Sheppard.  Next to the stargate we see TWO MARINE TEAMS
               assembled.

                                   CARTER
                         Colonel Sheppard this is Colonel
                         Carter, please respond.

                                   OPERATOR
                         We're not getting anything.  Either
                         his radio is off or it's been
                         damaged.

                                   CARTER
                         Right.

               Carter straightens herself and addresses the two marine teams
               below.

               ON MARINES

               They're looking up at Carter awaiting orders.

                                   CARTER (CONT'D)
                         You have a go.  Bring Colonel
                         Sheppard back home.

               One marine looks over the two teams then takes point.

                                   MARINE 2
                         You heard the Colonel!  Let's
                         hustle up!  Capisson, you're with
                         me.  Jones, take your team and move
                         on the village from the south.
                             (beat)
                         Move out!

               The two marine teams follow their superior and follow him
               through the stargate.

               ANGLE ON CARTER

               On her expression we...

                                                              FADE OUT.



                                    END OF ACT 2
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                                         ACT 3

                                                               FADE IN:

               INT. ATLANTIS - MEDICAL BAY

               McKay is standing next to Keller as she goes through a small
               pile of junk belonging to the dead men brought in earlier. 
               McKay is holding the BLUE DEVICE.

                                   KELLER
                         What am I looking for?

                                   MCKAY
                         I'm not sure.  Something that looks
                         like this would be helpful. 
                         Lights, flashy things...

                                   KELLER
                         Now you're just getting too
                         technical.  Flashy things?

                                   MCKAY
                         I don't have time to explain to you
                         all the possible object this device
                         could operate.  I thought you could
                         handle simple visual queues.

                                   KELLER
                         You know I'm a doctor, right?

                                   MCKAY
                         Yes, well, your field of expertise
                         often boils down little more than
                         "throw the plant at the germ and
                         see what happens."
                             (beat)
                         You still use leeches for Pete's
                         sake.

                                   KELLER
                         Next time you cure a plague let me
                         know.

                                   MCKAY
                         Hi, interstellar travel!  Nice to
                         meet you.

                                   KELLER
                         Oh, please.  You reversed
                         engineered that then prayed you
                         didn't get it wrong.
                             (beat)
                         Last time I saw the coyote strap
                         rockets to his shoes it didn't end
                         well.

                                   MCKAY
                         I think what we do is a little more
                         involved, wait, you're not stopping
                         are you?

               Keller tosses a pile of junk from her hands back onto the
               table.

                                   KELLER
                         Yes.  I am.  It smells terrible and
                         I'm not going to stand here and be
                         patronized while doing your dirty
                         work.
                             (beat)
                         You want it?  You find it.

               McKay regards the pile warily.

                                   MCKAY
                         Eh, it was a long shot anyway.

               Keller goes over to a basin and starts washing her hands.

                                   KELLER
                         You think of trying to turn it on?

                                   MCKAY
                         Have you not been listening?  We
                         don't know what it turns on. 
                         There's nothing to turn on if we
                         don't know what it turns on.
                             (beat)
                         Could turn on a TV for all we know-
                             (beat)
                         And we wouldn't know that unless we
                         were in front of it.

               Keller grabs a towel to dry her hands and stands beside McKay
               while looking at the pile of junk.

                                   KELLER
                         What if the TV is in there and we
                         can't see it?

                                   MCKAY
                         What are you talking about?

                                   KELLER
                         When I'm at home and I find a
                         remote I don't recognize, I go
                         around the house trying to find out
                         what it does.  Sooner or later
                         something either turns on or off.

                                   MCKAY
                         Huh.  You may have something there.

                                   KELLER
                             (tapping her head)
                         You see, not all plants and germs
                         up here.

                                   MCKAY
                         Clearly.

               McKay looks at the device for a moment then points it at the
               pile.  Nothing happens.

                                   MCKAY (CONT'D)
                         dang.

                                   KELLER
                         You sure you know how to use it?

                                   MCKAY
                         Yes I know how to use it.  Whatever
                         it works with isn't in that pile.

               OFF SCREEN Keller and McKay hear a long GROAN.  They both
               turn.

               KELLER AND MCKAY'S POV

               It came from behind a DRAWN CURTAIN.  We hear a LOUD COUGH.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Keller and McKay look at one another with puzzled expressions
               then carefully approach the curtain.  McKay reaches out and
               pulls the curtain back in one swift motion.

               ON TEYLA

               She's sitting up and trying to clear her throat.  Just behind
               her we see Ronon laying back but rubbing his eyes as if he's
               got a headache.  Teyla looks up and notices Keller and McKay.

                                   TEYLA
                         What is happening?  How did we get
                         here?

               ON KELLER AND MCKAY

               They both look at the device then back at Teyla.

                                                                CUT TO:

               EXT. FOREST - AFTERNOON

               SHEPPARD'S POV

               Just past a few rows of trees, maybe a couple of yards ahead,
               is a LONG MEDIUM SIZED TRANSPORT.  Outside it are FIVE armed
               men keeping watch.  One of the guards is keeping close to the
               treeline and a good distance from the rest.

               Sheppard looks on the ground and finds some stones.  He takes
               up a few then looks to find the guard again and lets one fly. 
               It hits the guard in the shoulder and he spins around, weapon
               aimed.

               GUARD'S POV

               There's nothing but trees and silence.

               ANGLE ON SHEPPARD

               Sheppard is keeping his body as straight and rigid as
               possible as he tries to keep hidden behind a tree.  In the
               BACKGROUND we see the guard looking in our direction.

               ANGLE ON GUARD

               The guard looks over his shoulder, to check on the positions
               of the other guards, then moves cautiously into the forest.

               BACK TO SCENE

               The guard inches closer and closer to Sheppard's position. 
               When Sheppard senses the guard is close he lowers his hand
               onto the trigger of his P-90.  The guard is coming right up
               on Sheppard's cover and holds out his weapon, sensing
               something is off.

               CLOSE ON SHEPPARD

               Sheppard's eyes are locked to the left, the side the guard is
               coming up on, and we see the tip of the guard's weapon come
               INTO FRAME.

               BACK TO SCENE

               The guard is about to spot Sheppard but Sheppard comes out
               first. 
               He wraps his right arm around the guard's weapon arm, keeping
               it pointed away from them both, and steps in, shoving his own
               weapon into the guard's gut.  The guard's eyes go wide
               realizing he's moments from death.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Please... make a noise.

               The guard is frozen.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         No?  Okay, you just bought yourself
                         a few more seconds.
                             (beat)
                         You're gonna tell me how to get
                         into your ship.  Then you're gonna
                         tell me who's in charge of this
                         operation and where I can find
                         them.
                             (beat)
                         But first...

               EXT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - AFTERNOON

               The five guards are lazily walking around when one of their
               COMMUNICATORS goes off.

                                   GUARD 1
                             (through comm)
                         I uhh... I got a kid out here, west
                         of the ship.  He... he says there's
                         more villagers east of the ship,
                         heading toward some cave.  Take
                         some men and check it out.

               EXT. FOREST - AFTERNOON

               SHEPPARD'S POV

               He sees one of the guards point to two others then head into
               the forest on the opposite side of the ship.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Not bad.  One guard left.

                                   GUARD 1 (O.S.)
                         What are you gonna do with me?

               BACK TO SCENE

               Sheppard has tied the guard's hands and feet with PLASTICUFFS
               and is holding the guard's communicator to the guard's mouth. 
               Sheppard then tucks it in his pocket and picks up the guard's
               weapon and gives the guard a look that drops his stomach into
               his feet.

                                   GUARD 1 (CONT'D)
                             (panicked)
                         Wait... I can still help.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         This thing have a stun setting?

                                   GUARD 1
                         No please-

               Before the guard can finish Sheppard shoots him.  The
               discharge is BLUE, just the same as the weapons Ronon and
               Teyla were attacked with.  The guard immediately goes limp. 
               Sheppard feels for a pulse.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Guess so.

               EXT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - AFTERNOON

               The remaining guard isn't really looking at anything in
               particular when Sheppard comes out of the forest and makes a
               line straight for him.  The guard goes to bring his weapon up
               but Sheppard shoots him with the other guard's weapon once in
               the face and twice in the chest.  The guard goes down without
               so much as a whimper.

               Sheppard then goes to the door controls of the ship, punches
               in a quick sequence, and disappears inside the ship once the
               doors open.

               INT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - CORRIDOR

               Sheppard is making his way down a long corridor lined with
               CLOSED DOORS on either side, spaced 10 FEET APART.  The walls
               are ORANGE/GOLD and the floor is GRATED.  He keeps to the
               right of the corridor until he comes to an INTERSECTION.  The
               path to the left leads into another intersection and the path
               to the right is a GRATED SPIRAL STAIRCASE going up.  Sheppard
               is about to go up when he hears FOOTSTEPS coming down.  He
               moves back around the corner and quickly opens one of the
               doors and ducks inside.

               INT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - HOLDING ROOM

               TIGHT ON SHEPPARD'S FACE

               Sheppard keeps his body pressed against the door.  We hear
               RUNNING FOOTSTEPS growing louder as they approach then
               quickly fade.  Sheppard relaxes once the sound is gone.

               BACK TO SCENE

               He then turns to lean his back against the door then notices,
               with horror, that he's in a room with 18 BODIES on NINE SLATS
               on each wall.  Sheppard recovers then goes over to one of the
               bodies.  It's a YOUNG WOMAN wearing simple clothes.  She
               looks peaceful.  Sheppard closes his eyes and feels for a
               pulse on her wrist.  His shoulders slump when he gets his
               answer.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         What the hell is going on here?

               Sheppard turns back to the door and pushes the control to
               open it.

               INT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - CORRIDOR

               Sheppard cautiously steps out of the room and looks down both
               ways of the corridor and sees that it is clear.  IN A SERIES
               OF QUICK CUTS he moves down 10 feet and opens another door. 
               More bodies.  A few more doors down and another room with
               bodies.  And another.  And another.

               CLOSE ON SHEPPARD'S FACE

               Anger and disgust twist his visage and his glare slowly turns
               to his left in the direction of the spiral grated staircase.

                                                                CUT TO:

               INT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - STAIRCASE

               ANGLE DOWN

               We see Sheppard looking up through the slots in the grated
               staircase.  Seeing it's clear he moves up.

                                                              TRACKING:

               INT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - CORRIDOR

               Sheppard sweeps the corridor and advances forward but stops
               when he hears voices.

                                   GUARD 2 (O.S.)
                             (over speaker)
                         They've swept through the village
                         and they're moving west.

               Sheppard inches toward the edge of an OPEN ROOM on the right
               side of the corridor.  He peeks in.

               INT/EXT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - CONTROL ROOM

               SHEPPARD'S POV

               He sees a man in brown and black with his back to him hunched
               over a CONTROL CONSOLE on the opposite side of a THICK WOOD
               TABLE.

                                   TOLBEN
                         Then gather your men in the forest
                         and slow them down!  We've got too
                         much cargo to risk losing.

                                   GUARD 2
                             (over speaker)
                         I need more men!

                                   TOLBEN
                         I've ordered the ship cleared.  You
                         have all there is.  Get it done!

               BACK TO SCENE

               Tolben slams his fist down on the console and stews while
               Sheppard slowly steps into the room.  At that moment the
               communicator Sheppard took from the guard goes off.

                                   GUARD 2
                             (over comm)
                         Croy, report your position!

               Sheppard knows what's coming and pivots off his right foot
               and launches himself back into the hall.  While he does avoid
               taking a body shot Tolben turns fast enough to shoot the
               energy weapon out of Sheppard's hand with his own.

               Sheppard lands on the left side of the opening to the room
               and nurses his numb hand.  He shakes his hand trying to get
               feeling back into it and pulls himself up into a crouch. 
               Tolben flips the table in his room over and ducks behind it
               for cover.

                                   TOLBEN
                         Who are you!?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         The guy that's putting an end to
                         your business here.

                                   TOLBEN
                         You have to be joking.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Does it sound like I'm laughing?

               His right hand still useless Sheppard takes his P-90 up with
               his left and sprays blindly into the room.  Bullets hit metal
               in WHITE SPARKS and SPLINTERS THE WOOD of Tolben's cover but
               that's it.  When Sheppard stops firing Tolben does the same
               and fires wildly into the corridor.  One of the shots nearly
               hit Sheppard and he pulls back even further from the door.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         You missed!

                                   TOLBEN
                         So did you, my friend.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         If we're friends now how about you
                         tell me your name?

                                   TOLBEN
                         You're trying to kill me and you
                         don't even know my name?  Who sent
                         you?  Kurs?  Mal'on?  I can pay you
                         more.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I'm not interested in money.

                                   TOLBEN
                         Not interested in money?  Well
                         that's interesting.  That makes you
                         either someone I've crossed and
                         don't remember or something of the
                         hero type.  Which is it stranger?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I'm no hero.

                                   TOLBEN
                         Ah, spoken like a true hero.  To be
                         honest I kind of felt you might be. 
                         People out for revenge typically
                         can't help brining the crimes of
                         the past up over and over.
                             (beat)
                         You know, "My name is blah blah,
                         you killed my father, prepare to
                         die."

                                   SHEPPARD
                         If you have to know your men killed
                         two of my friends. 
                         I'm a little annoyed about that.
                             (beat)
                         But since you have a ship full of
                         dead villagers, I figure that's
                         reason enough for me to kill you on
                         principle.

                                                                CUT TO:

               EXT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - AFTERNOON

               Tolben's men are trying to hold off the marines from Atlantis
               but it's no good.  The guards have no cover and simply cannot
               compete with the training of the U.S. Marine Corps.  They're
               dropping like flies.

                                   MARINE 2
                         Atlantis, we're advancing on a
                         transport ship.  Still no sign of
                         Sheppard.  We're almost done
                         mopping up outside.  We'll be
                         hitting the ship in sixty.

               INT/EXT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - CONTROL ROOM

               The CONTROL CONSOLE is relying the sounds outside.  We hear
               BALLISTICS FIRE mixed with less and less ENERGY BLASTS.  It's
               clear what's happening.

                                   TOLBEN
                         Looks like your friends are
                         winning.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I'd say so.

                                   TOLBEN
                         So, now what?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I was kinda hoping you'd give up.

                                   TOLBEN
                         What fun would there be in that?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Have it your way.

               Sheppard reaches into his utility vest and pulls out a FLASH
               GRENADE.  He pulls the pin and tosses it over the table.

               ANGLE ON TOLBEN

               The grenade lands at his feet and he leaps out of the way.

               BACK TO SCENE

               Sheppard already has his head tucked between his knees when
               the grenade goes off in a BRIGHT WHITE EXPLOSION of noise. 
               As soon as it begins its over and Sheppard stands up and
               enters the room, P-90 at the ready.

                                                              TRACKING:

               INT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - CONTROL ROOM

               Toblen didn't clear the table and is lying on the floor dazed
               and holding the sides of his head.  Sheppard trains his
               weapon on the man.

                                   TOLBEN
                         What now?

               His anger renewed Sheppard picks the man up and throws him
               into the corridor with all this strength.

                                                              TRACKING:

               INT. SLAVE TRANSPORT - CORRIDOR

               Tolben hits a bulkhead then bounces unceremoniously to the
               ground.  Sheppard tosses the man his weapon.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Pick it up.

               Tolben regards him a moment.

                                   TOLBEN
                         No.

               Sheppard aims his P-90 at him.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I said: Pick.  It.  Up.

               Tolben pulls himself up to his knees and slumps forward.

                                   TOLBEN
                         Won't shoot an unarmed man?
                             (beat)
                         I'm not going to soothe your
                         conscience for you.  If you're
                         going to kill me it's going to be
                         like this.

               Sheppard's temper flares and he kicks Tolben back into the
               bulkhead and keeps his boot on his chest.  He never takes his
               weapon off the man.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Pick it up!

                                   TOLBEN
                         Your problem is that you're a good
                         man.  Instead of shooting me in the
                         back you tried to sneak up on me. 
                         Instead of gunning me down on the
                         floor you want me armed when you
                         deliver the killing blow.

               Sheppard lets his boot off Tolben and takes a few paces back. 
               His face is unreadable.

                                   TOLBEN (CONT'D)
                         See, just like the good man. 
                         That's one difference between us. 
                         I won't let anything get in my way
                         when something needs to be done. 
                         But you?  You need the situation to
                         be just right.  You need to know
                         that you did everything you could
                         to preserve life before you take
                         it.
                             (beat)
                         So, what?  You take me prisoner? 
                         How long do you plan on holding me? 
                         You going to put me on trial?  What
                         gives you the right?  You're a
                         hypocrite.  I do what I do because
                         I can.  You have to tell yourself
                         you're doing something better. 
                         Something higher.
                             (beat)
                         You want to know something?

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (cold)
                         What's that?

                                   TOLBEN
                         You're worse than me.  You just
                         don't know it.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Okay.  I'll bite.  I'm worse than
                         you

               Tolben snorts and dismisses Sheppard with a glance.

               TIGHT ON SHEPPARD'S P-90 BARREL

               Sheppard fires a short burst of THREE ROUNDS.

               BACK TO SCENE

               OFF SCREEN we HEAR Tolben's body fall over.  Sheppard lowers
               his weapon and looks dispassionately over his work.

                                                              FADE OUT.



                                    END OF ACT 3
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               INT. ATLANTIS - CORRIDOR

               Sheppard is walking, obviously heading toward somewhere, when
               Ronon catches up to him.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Hey, how you feeling?

                                   RONON
                         A little groggy but that's about
                         it.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Yeah, Dr. Keller says it takes
                         about a day for the effects of the
                         device to wear off.

                                   RONON
                         Any word from Keller's team?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         They got everyone off the ship and
                         back to the village.  Removing the
                         devices wasn't difficult.  But,
                         like you, they'll be out of it for
                         awhile.

                                   RONON
                         I guess if you've got to move a lot
                         of people keeping them near death
                         is one way to make sure the cargo
                         doesn't start anything.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         According to Keller and McKay the
                         devices Tolben had on you were
                         intended for life support.  Kind of
                         like a mini intensive care unit for
                         comatose people on the go.
                             (beat)
                         It should be very helpful for a lot
                         of people back home.

                                   RONON
                         Except when put on a healthy person
                         it takes over all biological
                         functions.
                             (beat)
                         So Teyla and I looked pretty
                         convincing, huh?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Had the doc fooled.  Atlantis'
                         scanners too.

               Sheppard stops in front of a DOOR.

                                   SHEPPARD (CONT'D)
                         This is my stop.

                                   RONON
                         Right.  We'll talk later.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Okay.

               Ronon walks a few paces away then turns back to Sheppard as
               he's about to hit a button next to the door.

                                   RONON
                         Sheppard?

               Sheppard turns.

                                   RONON (CONT'D)
                         I wanted to say thanks.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         For what?

                                   RONON
                         You thought we were dead and you
                         weren't going to let the people
                         that did it get away.  Not many
                         would do that.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Well, I'm sure you'd have done the
                         same for me.

               Ronon nods then walks OFF SCREEN.  Sheppard pushes the button
               on the door.  It opens revealing Dr. HEIGHTMEYER.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         Colonel, you're early.  Come in.

               INT. ATLANTIS - DOCTOR HEIGHTMEYER'S OFFICE

               Heightmeyer motions and Sheppard enters.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         Please, sit.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Thanks.

               Sheppard takes a seat on a small couch and Heightmeyer takes
               a seat off to the side.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         So, Colonel Sheppard, what can I do
                         for you?

                                   SHEPPARD
                             (unfomfortable)
                         It's... about my last mission.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         Yes.  I read your report.  While
                         I'm sure you know it was unwise for
                         you to go off on your own like that
                         I can understand why you might. 
                         You personality profile makes it
                         pretty clear you might do
                         something... rash if you think it's
                         for the greater good.  You have
                         nothing to be ashamed about.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I'm not so sure.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         Why is that?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         I did something that didn't exactly
                         make it into the report.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         Okay.  What is it?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         Tolben.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         Your report states you killed him
                         in a fire fight inside the
                         transport.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         That's not entirely accurate.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         He was killed by someone else?

                                   SHEPPARD
                         No, it was me.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         What then?

               Sheppard breaks eye contact with Heightmeyer.  He can't look
               at her just now.

                                   SHEPPARD
                         He wasn't armed... when I killed
                         him.

               Heightmeyer sits back in her chair taking in the new
               information and Sheppard's obvious discomfort over the
               revelation.

                                   HEIGHTMEYER
                         I see.
                             (beat)
                         How does that make you feel?

               Sheppard looks at her, wrestling with the question.  While
               he's considering his answer we PUSH IN and...

                                                         FADE TO BLACK.



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/applause

Very well done! You especially captured the characters nicely (especially McKay).

The only possible flaw I saw was the idea of someone crawling away after getting shot by Ronon. If you get hit by that hand cannon, you're DOWN, even if it was set on stun. But that's just a minor nitpick. Other than that, I think you did a fantastic job!

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Thanks for reading it! It's a tad longer than your standard 'fanfic" fare. Which a spec on any existing IP is, really.

Of the things I'd like to go back and fix, dialog isn't one of them. I think I nailed the voices and whenever I go back and read it, it's dead on. I don't normally toot my own horn, but I'm very proud of that. Most everything that is wrong with the script is technical, so it's nice to see the dialog holds up even fours years later.

McKay was fun to write. I didn't want to get into overly scientific dialog with him, because that's boring to write, so I gave him something small to play with to still be smug about. I really like the banter between him and Keller. And this spec was written before Keller was a recurring character and fleshed out. I was wading into new territory with her!

Man... I like this script...
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Yeah, I want to go watch some SG:A now.
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ArchAngel wrote:Yeah, I want to go watch some SG:A now.
That's great, but watch Stargate: Universe instead, if you haven't already. It's frickin' amazing.

They really tried to do something different with the franchise, darken it some, take the situation seriously (something Atlantis didn't do, which turned me off around season 3), and breathe some new life into the brand.

Unfortunately some "fans" turned on it and did everything they could to hurt it. It's a shame. SG:U could have done some incredible things.
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Yeah, I've been meaning too. I've always liked the stargate franchise and Robert Carlyle has always great to watch.
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Robert Carlyle is really, really great in it. I became a fan of his because of that. Now I look forward to his parts in Once Upon A Time whenever my wife is watching it.
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His performance as Rumplestiltskin is really the crowning gem for that show; I don't think I'd be keeping up with it with my wife if he wasn't in it.
First time I saw him was in Hitler: Rise of Evil. He just does a magnificent villain.

Anyhow, on your recommendation, I watched the first 3 episodes of SGU. I think I'm hooked. It's great.
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ArchAngel wrote:His performance as Rumplestiltskin is really the crowning gem for that show; I don't think I'd be keeping up with it with my wife if he wasn't in it.
First time I saw him was in Hitler: Rise of Evil. He just does a magnificent villain.

Anyhow, on your recommendation, I watched the first 3 episodes of SGU. I think I'm hooked. It's great.
It's crack, I tell ya. Aside from a few narrative missteps, SyFy had a great things on their hands. But I can't blame them for canning it. Not when franchise "fans" were as hostile to it as they were.

That and trying to attract a new audience to a long running IP is a monumental order. They were obviously looking for more people than just Stargate fans to watch it, which of course meant alienating some of those fans because you couldn't keep on with what you were doing for 10+ years. I think Caprica suffered from the same problem.

The original idea for what became Caprica wasn't at all based upon the Battlestar Galactica universe. It was it's own thing. But some people thought it could do with some brand recognition and put it in that box. Except I don't know how much consideration was given to 1) the audience who wouldn't watch it simply because it was attached to the Battlestar Galactica brand and 2) the people who weren't going to watch it because it was so radically different from that same brand.

Who is your audience in this scenario?

I half wonder if Stargate: Universe would have survived longer if it didn't have that attachment to a franchise that wasn't going to grow. While the attachment is nice, I don't think it was necessary.
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